- My goal is to say that any narrative that makes a student feel like a victim typically involves a bad sponsor. I use William’s definition of victim in my essay I disagree with Brandt’s belief that all literary sponsors have bad motives because there are many narratives about teachers simply grading harshly or asking students to read uninteresting books that have really traumatized students. Neither of my peers were explicit about what they believe my claim is, but I hope I was clear enough. I used Skylah B’s narrative to show an example of good intentions leading to a positive relationship to reading. I compared this to Alexis C’s narrative because she had a similar sponsor to Skylah, but she perceived herself as a victim. I used Austin S’s narrative to showcase a narrative in which a sponsor really did have selfish motives. It was to exemplify Brandt’s idea of a sponsor and to affirm her beliefs.
- I think that I may put too much detail into my essay when I summarize narratives for context. It’s hard for me to figure out exactly what details are important, so I tend to put a lot in just in case. One of my peer editors did notice that I needed to give more context and set up for Williams’ quotes, so I need to work on elaborating why he’s part of the conversation in my essay.
- As for evidence, I only have two body paragraphs right now, and I know I need to make another. I’m still trying to figure out exactly how that paragraph is going to further my claim. In order to write it, I will most likely need to use one or two additional narratives.
