1. I really struggled with writing my introduction because I wrote my body paragraphs without really having a clear claim. I had to make up a claim that I forced to fit my body paragraphs which was difficult. I didn’t even know where to start for my conclusion, so I haven’t written it yet.
2. GianCarlo said my argument was “supported very strongly.” 

      5. My peer told me I should state my claim in the first paragraph before I summarize Gee, Jordan, and              Delpit’s ideas. This makes sense. I only stated the other authors’ claims first because of They Say, I                Say.

      6. GianCarlo said I need to add better examples to “boost the attention span of the reader”.